HW for 10/23

1. You must bring in your typed, revised***  Causal Argument Essay, due for a grade. Review source citation chapters and the Integration and Citation handout in Unit 3 on myLearning.

2. Read Chapter 13 in Writing Arguments, which introduces concepts needed for our next essay, an Ethical Evaluation essay. 

Today's Major Focus/Lesson

• Below is the third page from the "Causal Arguments Writing Strategies Models" handout you can download from Unit 3 on myLearning.

• This lesson, and the larger handout, expands upon the "Integration and Citation Notes" handout that can be found within the same unit. Review both of them and work to integrate the ideas into your own revisions. (Again, we will cover the concepts within the models, in class, as we move on, but I did want to give you some general tips on how to improve your essays from first draft, focusing on source integration).

Integration of Source Material

• Evidence should be dictated by the topic sentence claim.
• Evidence should be explained in regards to the topic sentence claim.
• Evidence should be organized by order of reasons claimed.
• Evidence should be put into context of the topic sentence claim. Use the R sentences to help set up your quotes, summaries, or paraphrases.

•  Quoted evidence should be explained in synonymous language leading in or out of quote.

o   Do not simply restate the quote’s own phrases to make a point: 

Example: When Eliot writes that the clouds are “Like a patient etherized upon a table” (line 4), he means the clouds a medical patient etherized on a table-->

 No, clarify what that image suggests to you using synonyms--> When Eliot writes that the clouds are “Like a patient etherized upon a table” (line 4), he means the thick block of clouds creates a feeling of numbness in Prufrock as he walks through the city.

Model for How to Lead Into Evidence (transitional phrases)…

The Orlando shooting massacre symbolizes the worst nightmare for any American parent, the loss of a child at the hands of a hateful person, but Smith’s “Good Bones” addresses the horrible reality with a bit of optimism that was sorely needed. As the largest mass shooting in American history, social media exploded with outrage and fear; the forty-nine adults were also somebodies’ children, as evidenced by individual stories about the victims. Among the handfuls of stories published and tweeted, … (cite).  At the same time that stories of the victims were being shared on social media, Maggie Smith’s “Good Bones” was republished, and just happened to be a poem about a parent’s desire to protect her children from the world. The poem thematically address the outrage that “Life is short,” but also ….

·       What do I need to most take away from this A-level model?

o   Look at the bolded phrases. The student writer is attempting to use transitional phrases to move between the multiple texts that he/she believes are connected. In essence, they are building each claimed causal relationships between the shooting and the poem using transitional phrases that relate to the claim.

o   Any evidence presented is made as a dependent clause with a sentence presenting the student’s own argument. Evidence is never allowed to be in its own sentence, separate from the claim.